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    Dear Tom

    This is Li Ke from Beijing. The reason that I am writing to you is because I am looking for a teaching job. Besides of that, here goes another thing that i think is important, which is that  I think I will be a good teacher.

     Lastly, I believe you should know this at the very end of my letter, and that is teacher  is great job, I can also get more experience form my job. I appreciate your time for reading my letter and I am looking forward to you reply. I hope everything goes with you life.

    Best regards,

    Li Ke

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

Dear Tom,

I am writing to you because I am looking for a teaching job. I believe that I will be a good teacher. Teaching is a great job and I can gain more experience from it.

Looking forward to your reply.

Best regards,
Li Ke

评分：第三档 13-18分

根据作文的内容要点和语言运用，给予基本完成试题规定任务的分数。作文基本符合要求，表达了作者找工作的目的，并提到了想成为一名好老师的信心和教学的好处。然而，作文中存在一些语法错误和词汇不准确的问题，同时也可以在结构和表达上进行进一步的改进。总的来说，该作文需要更多的修饰和细节，以展示出作者自己的特长和优势。

请参考以下修改建议：

Dear Tom,

My name is Li Ke, and I am writing to express my interest in finding a teaching position. I strongly believe that I possess the qualities required to be an effective and successful teacher.

Firstly, I am passionate about education and have a strong desire to make a positive impact on the lives of my students. I am dedicated, patient, and enthusiastic, and I strive to create engaging and interactive lessons that cater to the needs of each individual student.

Secondly, I have a solid educational background and relevant experience in teaching. I hold a bachelor's degree in Education and have completed internships at local schools, where I gained practical experience in lesson planning, classroom management, and student assessment. I am confident in my ability to create a stimulating learning environment and foster a love for learning among my students.

Lastly, I am eager to continue learning and growing as an educator. Teaching is not just a job for me; it is a lifelong passion. I am committed to staying updated on the latest teaching methodologies and incorporating innovative techniques into my lessons to ensure that my students receive the best education possible.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the opportunity to discuss how my skills and experiences align with your requirements.

Best regards,
Li Ke