2016年10月作文：Watching movies at home or in a cinma

作文内容：
2016年10月作文，要求完成一篇100词左右的英文写作任务。
51 某英文报社正在举办题为“Watching movies at home or in a cinma?的征文活动。内容包括如下：

1.你喜欢在家还是在电影院看电影。
2. 理由是什么？

Watching movies at Home or in a Cinema

Recently, more and more people are talking about watching movies at homeor in a cinema. From my perspective ,it is totally undoubted that I enjoy watchingmovies at home. The reason why I believe so are listed as below.

Firstly, I appreciate the variety of movie genres available in onlinewhere I will find it. From science fiction movie and action movie to romantic movieand comedy movie, every genres bring me about different emotions and fellingfor me . Besides, it`s easier for me to understand that I can watch moviesanytime at home, and I don`t need to choose the time to go cinema.

I can easily come to the conclusion that watching movies at home is moreconvenient than cinema.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

评分结果：
该作文可以被评为第三档，得分为13-18分。

该作文基本完成了题目规定的任务，清楚地表达了关键内容要点。文章涵盖了喜欢在家看电影的原因，并给出了合理的解释和论据支持。语法结构和词汇能够满足任务的最低要求，但存在一些语言错误，例如拼写错误和标点符号使用不准确。这些错误对理解文章内容基本不产生较大的影响。

为了提高得分，应尽量避免语言错误，包括拼写错误和标点符号使用不准确。同时，在句子结构和词汇选择上要更加准确和丰富，以增强文章的表达能力。此外，可以适当增加一些具体例子来支持观点，使得文章更具说服力和可读性。

在我作文的基础上如何进行具体的修改，要求：
  1.字数100个词左右
  2. 评分标准为第一档

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-12 20:27
在我作文的基础上如何进行具体的修改，要求：
  1.字 ...

Watching movies at Home or in a Cinema

When it comes to watching movies, I prefer doing so from the comfort of my own home rather than going to a cinema. There are several reasons why I hold this opinion.

Firstly, the variety of movie genres available online is truly astounding. Science fiction, action, romantic, comedy - all genres are easily accessible at the click of a button. This allows me to explore different emotions and experiences with ease.

Additionally, watching movies at home provides unparalleled convenience. Unlike going to a cinema, I can enjoy a film anytime I want, without having to worry about specific showtimes. This flexibility allows me to tailor my movie-watching experience to fit my schedule comfortably.

In conclusion, watching movies at home provides a wide range of genre options and unmatched convenience, making it the preferred choice for me. From the comfort of my couch, I can immerse myself in captivating stories and fully enjoy the cinematic experience.

要求是字数为100个词左右

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-12 20:30
要求是字数为100个词左右

Watching movies at home or in a cinema is a topic that has sparked much debate. Personally, I find the comfort and convenience of watching movies at home to be preferable. With a wide variety of genres available online, I can easily find a film that suits my mood. Additionally, being able to watch movies anytime at home eliminates the need to plan outings to the cinema. This saves time and allows me to enjoy the movie in a relaxed environment. Overall, watching movies at home provides a personalized and convenient experience that I truly appreciate.

在你修改作文意见中其中有一句“Unlike going to a cinema, I can enjoy a film anytime I want, without having to worry about specific showtimes.”，我是否可以写成“What is more, it`s easier for me to understand that unlike going to a cinema, I can enjoy a film anytime I want, without having to worry about specific showtimes.”

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-12 21:33
在你修改作文意见中其中有一句“Unlike going to a ci ...

Yes, you can definitely include the sentence "What is more, it's easier for me to understand that unlike going to a cinema, I can enjoy a film anytime I want, without having to worry about specific showtimes." It adds an additional point to support your preference for watching movies at home and adds more clarity to your argument. Just make sure that the sentence fits within the required word count and flows well with the rest of your essay.

点评这句话的问题 “I can easily come to the conclusion that watching movies at home is more convenient than cinema”，语法以及单词的使用是否准确

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-12 21:36
点评这句话的问题 “I can easily come to the conclu ...

这句话的语法和单词使用是准确的。句子结构简洁明了，没有明显的语法错误。同时，单词的使用也是恰当的，表达了你认为在家看电影比去电影院更方便的观点。