作文批改及评分

Green Transportation
   I do a lot of things to support green transportation, such as riding a bike, taking a bus and walking. Among these options,I Personally prefer riding a bike.
   When I was young, I did't know how to ride a bike.It was my mother who patiently taught me how to ride after dinner every day. After I grow up, I eventually leamed to ride by myself. Soon enough, I started teaching my own child how to ride a bike as well. I am used to riding a bike to work. Till now, it is my favorite. The primary factor is that it helps me to get a healthy body and reduce pollution.
   I strongly belive that everyone should experience the joy of riding a bike, as it significantly benefits our environment.Not only does it promote physical Fitness and overall well-being,but it also helps reduce air pollution.By choosing - green transportation methods like riding a bike,we can all contribute to creating a healthier and cleaner world.

Overall, this is a well-written essay expressing support for green transportation. The writer effectively utilizes personal experiences to explain their preference for riding a bike and highlights the benefits it brings to both individuals and the environment. The essay also successfully conveys the message that everyone should embrace green transportation methods.

Some minor suggestions for improvement:
- In the first sentence, consider adding a comma after "options" to improve clarity.
- In the second paragraph, "did't" should be corrected to "didn't" for proper grammar.
- In the same paragraph, "leamed" should be corrected to "learned."
- In the third paragraph, "am" should be changed to "have been" to indicate ongoing action.
- Consider using a stronger transition word between the second and third paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas.

In terms of grading, I would give this essay a score of 8 out of 10. The writer effectively conveys their support for green transportation and provides personal examples, but there are some minor grammatical errors that could be corrected. Additionally, further development of ideas and incorporating more evidence or examples could enhance the overall persuasiveness of the essay.