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Dear smiths:
I have learned from the advertisement that you want a tutor.  I would like you to consider me for the position.
I am very passionate about this job and I find my experience and strengths are well matched with your requirements. I get good grades in school and I have won several prizes in the contests.Besides, my English and Chinese proficiency are good so I can communicate fluently with the boy. I will be available at every weekends.
I would be very grateful if you give me the opportunity. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Wang Lin

Dear Smiths,

I have learned from the advertisement that you are looking for a tutor. I would like to be considered for the position.

I am very passionate about this job, and I believe that my experience and strengths are well-suited to your requirements. I consistently receive good grades in school and have also won several prizes in contests. Furthermore, my English and Chinese proficiency is strong, which enables me to communicate fluently with the boy. I would be available every weekend.

I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to work with you, and I eagerly await your response.

Yours sincerely,

Wang Lin